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Thank you new friends for befriending me here. Hope you are well and that your recent hollidays were good to you all. I'll try to post here more often.To let each of us know what we're up to lets post comments in one anothers 360 blogs. Okay?
YIKES! I can't belive I've been this long(again) without coming back here. Since my last time here an authour friend made a logo for me. I added logo to my recently new blog at word press. Link to my wordpress blog is Author Jerry Race Blog I hope that works.
If you viist my WP blog please leave a comment. Thanks in advance.
Jerry
SUPER QUEEN!
by Jerry Race
Copyright by Jerry Race
Published by
Superhero
This is a tongue and cheek type comedy starring Amber Lee, a drag queen, who lives in San Francisco. The story opens on a Friday afternoon during Gay Pride week. During that weekend she learns that her younger lover, a Special Agent for the FBI could be having an affair with another man. Her world is soon turned upside down when one of her clients gives her a gift, an Egyptian bracelet, which she soon discovers has unusual qualities – blue gems designed to look like scarabs, glow. And later when she wears the bracelet more of its unusual qualities are revealed to her. At the snap of her fingers she’s transformed into a brand spanking new superhero. Wearing lavender leotards, turquoise boots and matching cape she figures out that she has similar powers to those of Super Girl and Superman. When her lover, Michael Harmon is kidnapped by the leader of a diamond smuggling gang he’s been investigating she wonders if she should allow the FBI to free him or should she attempt to rescue him on her own. But with her powers being new to her Amber hesitates. She doesn’t want to screw up anything that could possibly cause any harm to her lover?
Papa Jon, leader of the smugglers, plans to use the diamonds he’s smuggled to purchase a twenty foot Nike Hercules short-range missile. A year earlier, his only child, Jason, was killed in a gay bar consumed by flames. Although faulty wiring ended the establishment and killing those who weren’t able to escape a fiery death his sick mind blames the entire San Francisco gay community for his son’s demise. So he plans to end the lives of many people and what a better way to do that on the biggest San Francisco Gay Pride Parade ever.
Can this unlikely hero save her captive lover and prevent a devastating event?
Dear d,
I met literary agent Jenny Bent when she was a special guest at http://www.romancedivas.com
Jenny's site is http://www.jennybent.com.
Many of her clients are women. So I asked if she represented male clients. She does. Then I mentioned Super Queen, my 1st completed novel. She thought I was kidding about the main character being a drag queen who becomes a superhero. A couple of people told her I wasn't kidding.
After that chat I emailed her a query for SQ. She likes the story idea, but said it needs to be more mainstream by adding a prminanent straight character. I can and will do that. Had one of those characters mentioned in mc's bio. Can bring her into current story, somehow. She might be similar to Grace A in Will & Grace or maybe even a combination of Grace & Karen. I just have to figure out how to include the character in the story.
Then I told Jenny that I'm writing a suspense and a horror novel. She was more interested in the horror novel. So I sent her a query on Ring of Darkness. She liked it and requested about a 5 page synopsis along with 1st 3 chapters. Now she tells me that she's taken them to her home. YAY! At least they'll get a read and so far not be in her slush pile.
So far I've only written close to 100 pages. Now I have to get myself to focus on just writing ROD.
An idea for a male male erotica novel has been bugging me. I started it for a NANO writing thing well over a year ago. I think I found a place suitable for piublishing it. AVAILABLE is the title. So I added more layers to chapter 1. http://www.cobblestonepress.com accespts all sorts of erotica stories as long as stories are well written. Every Friday night cobblestone has a chat. In one of the chats one of the women became my crit partner. That was before she became one of cobblestones editors. So now I'll need to spend time to finish Available.
Plus I want to spend time finishing editing Super Queen. There are currently 30 chapters and so far I'm up to chapter 15. Of course, one of the yahoo groups I belong to literatture_writing_cafe is helping me with edits. Unfortunately we can only sub 1 chapter per week. Sigh. LWC is an advance writing group with a lot of wonder members. Each one is great in their feedback and we help one another better our manuscripts.
I'll shut up now.
Want to do some writing.
Ciao for now kiddos.
Jerry
Dear d,
Romance Divas dot come is a forum where writers help each other better their MS's. This month GinaW held a contest. Nor prize, just knick knacks. Anyway I entered 1st 5 pages of my MS Deadly Obsession. They received wonderful feedback. I'm posting one of them here. I could post others, but don't want to take up a lot of space. Naturally, the critiques/comments gave my ego a boost. Now I know I'm on the right track. 
Jerry
No. She was about to take orders from him any more. She kept running until she reached the cabinet. When she halted at the sink she lowered her right hand. Curled her fingers around the handle of a steak knife. She brought her hand out of the sink, with a firm grip on the knife's handle and turned around, pointing the tip of the blade in front of her.
He lay on the floor. The knife had penetrated his groin.
His right hand around the handle. Blood oozed on her linoleum.
ROMANCE DIVAS We All Win Best 5 Pages Feedback Sheet
List at least TWO strengths you see in these five pages. (I've listed four spots, but you may list as many strengths as you wish.) What did you LIKE about this author's writing and/or story? Please be as specific as possible using examples from the entry. Feel free to share your subjective, objective, directive opinion.
1:: Fantastic descriptions. I can clearly picture her walking around in the dark, heart pounding from the thunderstorm and the sense of unease.
2:: Chad seriously chilled me. Crazy cokehead ex-boyfriends bent on revenge are not my idea of a good time, but make wonderful baddies. Good job with him.
3:: I like Jessica. She's got grit and guts. Despite being freaked out by the storm, and the sudden appearance of a crazy man, she tries to keep her cool and figure a way out of it. And you give a great glimpse of her morals in the end there, when she dials 911 instead of offing him.
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List two weakness you see in this snippet. What did you dislike about this author's writing and/or story? If you did not sense any weaknesses or dislike anything, then list two more strengths. Or one weakness and three strengths. Please be as specific as possible, using examples from the entry. Feel free to share your subjective, objective, directive opinion. Just don't be rude or hurtful.
1:: The sentence explaining that she'd seen the news earlier and knew the storm was coming seems distracting and unneccesary. The reader doesn't need to know that she was aware of the storm coming. If she was, why were her windows open to begin with?
2:: There are a couple places that seem choppy and abrupt. Maybe try combining a few sentences here and there to vary your sentence length. Too many long sentences drags it out, and too many short ones make it hard to read and absorb. (Highlighted in blue.)
Could you give the author some tips to help distinguish between a romantic suspense and a suspense?
You'll have to see if the suspense wins out over the relationship. In this passage there is no clue as to who her lover will be, or if there will even be one, so I can't get any idea from that. Once you finish your first draft check to see if the romance is prominant or secondary. Based on this excerpt alone, it could go either way.
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